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A tear falls,
Leaving holes within the ground below.
They open ever further with each new step,
The baby boy spreading his touch upon polluted world,
Leaving it with the freshness of new life.
Cleansing it of what has been.

The mother stares down from above,
Her heart sinking onto the fresh new ground,
And joining with the innocence of the baby – just for a second.
But a second is all that it takes for her to live again,
A second is all that is needed to love,
To regain hope.

One second.
Also for the WFA hope contest, inspired by 'The young' by ~Life-takers-crayons. :D

My other entry: here (click)
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Dragonfly2093 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2007
I very much like the layout of this poem. Though, I do think "A tear falls" should be on its own like "One second". Those two could be connected by that, maybe...one second for a tear to fall.

"The mother stares down from above,"

"But a second is all that it takes for her to live again,"

Is the mother dead? These lines suggest it, though she could easily be "looking down on the baby" when the baby was in her arms. Still, if she isn't dead, the suggestion of it adds another layer to the poem. Good luck!
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MaskedVengeance Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2007
Hehe, glad you like the layout, it might make sense doing that, but don't you think that'd make it a bit awkward to read from the start? If you read the first three words as separate to the rest?

I don't know, to be honest, I'm writing this comment without looking at the poem. *looks embarrased and lazy*

The mother is dead, if you want her to be. :P
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Dragonfly2093 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
Of course I don't want the mother to be dead! I don't want anybody to be dead! I'm refraining from putting a line of exclamation marks here!

I don't think it would make it awkward. I said (ok, I murmured=P) it aloud and it sounded ok. Either way, the poem's good. *tuts at laziness and embarrassed-ness*
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MaskedVengeance Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2007
That had me laughing. =p

If you don't think it would make it awkward, I might change it. :)
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